11.00 pm on a Friday night. I was down deep down in the sewage with my best friend. “Why did we think this would be a good idea” I said. We came to a stop when we looked forward there was a dark tunnel with a little bit of light at the end. My friend didn’t get scared and moved forward. She told me to come. I didn’t want to I even thought of just going back but no I knew I couldn’t avoid it anymore I had to go in. To my surprise at the end was a way out
Every Morning on my way to school I walk past the haunted house of milsberry street. Every time I walk past I get an itch on the side of my neck. It is so wired đł. But today was even weirder. I was on my way home when I started to feel like that I was being pulled toward the haunted house. I couldn’t avoid it any longer. Had to go in. The door creeked open, and I stepped inside. The floor cracking underneath me. I almost died in that house today.
Draft #2
The haunted house of milsbury street.
Every Morning on my way to school, I walk past the haunted house of milsberry street. Every time I walk past I get an itch on the side of my neck. It’s just so weird đł. But today was even weirder.
I was on my way homewhen I started to feel like that I was being pulled toward the haunted house. I couldnât avoid it any longer. Had to go in. The door creeked open, and I stepped inside. The floor cracking underneath me. I almost died in that house.
As I was walking home I saw this light through the bushes. I walked to the light and saw this creepy, dusty haunted house. As I walked towards the the house I could here whispering and my name being called. All of a sudden i felt a tap on my shoulder it was a little gnome he whispered to me “go in, it will be fine”. Then he disappeared. I did want to go in but it was so creepy. I couldn’t wait any longer I had to go in….
I was walking home and I saw this haunted house and had the erge to go inside but I didn’t . Because it looked very scary but fun. I walked pass that house 365 times and then I told my brain and beating heart and decided I couldn’t do it any more I had to go in. As I walked in I saw the ground dropping and unstable I sprinted in to the haunted house so I wouldn’t die. I looked outside and say big and small rocks to get back. I was yo tired so I decided to try tomorrow.
It was a cold stormy night but that didn’t stop the two boys from heading to the rickety old house that was believed to be,haunted!. âQuick! This wayâ Josh said as joe ran into another pole. â come on the quicker we get this dare done the quicker we can say we did itâ. âFineâ mumbled joe. Then they ran through a paddock and came to the house. âAlright let’s goâ said josh. â wait I don’t want to!â Said joe. âAwww he’s scaredâ said josh as he ran in. Joe stood there as josh taunted him. He couldnât avoid it any longer. He had to go in. Then, josh disappeared.
It was a cold stormy night but that didn’t stop the two boys from heading to the rickety old house that was believed to be,haunted!. âQuick! This wayâ Josh said as Joe ran into another pole. âCome on the quicker we get this dare done the quicker we can say we did itâ. âFineâ mumbled joe. Then they ran through a paddock and came to the house. âAlright let’s goâ said josh. âWait I don’t want to!â Said joe. âAwww he’s scaredâ said josh as he ran in. Joe stood there as josh taunted him. He couldnât avoid it any longer. He had to go in. Then, josh disappeared.
It was cold night and my brother dared me to go inside an abandon house so I went to the front of the house and I turned around I couldn’t avoid it I had to go in. I stepped in the front door and had a little look around And I saw a little black figure that started to grow bigger and bigger and bigger till he was the size of the house it picked me up and opened its mouth I screamed and then I woke up in my cosy bed.
It was cold night and my brother dared me to go inside an abandon house so I went to the front of the house and I looked back my brother said âgo onâ I looked back around I couldn’t avoid it I had to go in. I stepped in the front door and had a little look around And I saw a little black figure that started to grow bigger and bigger and bigger till he was the size of the house it picked me up and opened its mouth I screamed and then I woke up in my cosy bed.
It was a cold night and my brother dared me to go inside an abandon house. I went to the front door and I looked back my brother who said âgo onâ! I turned back around I couldn’t avoid it I had to go in. I stepped in the front door and looked around. I saw a little black figure that started to grow bigger and bigger and bigger till he was the size of a ten foot tall giant. It picked me up and opened its mouth I screamed with terror⌠then I woke up in my cosy bed!
Once There was a guy called bob he held the record for the world’s most heavy
Man but one day he went to the doctors and they told him he had two weeks to live so he went on a extreme diet and within three months he was finer than a fiddle.
But deep inside him he had a strong urge to eat junk food but he managed to
keep it buried deep inside him until one day he was going out for a run
and a new donut shop had been open he said I couldn’t avoid it any longer I had to go in and so he did and the shop soon closed down because the main customer
Got his title back
One day my friends and and I were walking to the Iga and we always walk past this house and it looked haunted we couldn’t hesitate we walked in. Right when we walked in a door slammed and we all got scared, then we heard a person say “leave, leave now or else”. We didn’t leave we stayed and we walked in the first room and there was a chair covered in blood and next to it was a dead body and then we saw the door slam behind us and it locked we couldn’t get out and then we heard the voice say ” I told you to leave you didn’t now your dead”.
There is a house on my street made of old decayed wood. The house didn’t seem very stable but it’s still holding up. There were many lifeless trees and grass around. The house is big and deserted. Or at least that’s what some people say. But lately there have Been many people on our street go missing and we had to find them. I think that someone has kidnaped them in the house. If no one checked the house we may never see them again. I couldn’t avoid it any more I had to go in.
Monday 15/06/17
This weekend I’m staying at my grandparents house, in Warlock. I love going over to their house, but there is this wired house on their street. It’s so creepy and mysterious.
Tuesday. Today I finally arrived at my grandparents house. I’m so excited because I haven’t seen them since Christmas. As I was about to walk the the house I heard this wired sound. I turned around and saw the creepy house. Their was a light that kept flickering and the curtains kept moving. I really wanted to go in but I was to scared. I couldn’t avoid it any longer. I had to go in.
One cloudy day I went to school. I was looking forward to going to school because we had fitness the whole day. When I got school there was a new kid. He seamed a little strange. In the first lesson of fitness he looked kinda sad. So I asked him to come with me and play. He started to really like me as a friend. So after woods he invited me to his house. His house looked really creepy and dark. When I got there he was holding a gun. So I quickly ran out. I couldn’t avoid it any longer. I had to go. The next day he quit school. I wondered who he was going to try and murder next. The End
I couldn’t avoid it any longer. I had to go in. That house I think it’s haunted but I don’t know for sure so I must find out. My curiosity will probably be the death of me. There’s been heaps of rumours but of course I don’t know if they are true or not so I’m going to find out today. As soon as I open the door I hear something. Something like a whisper? I couldn’t make out what it said though. Then there was a loud bang…I should go…
Once there was a haunted house well that’s what my mum told me. âHi I’m Bob Nonfear i’m only scared of clowns and spiders nothing else well that’s what I thought. until I found that haunted house that my mum was telling me about. I could not help but go in there at first it was not scary until I saw the photo of a clown on the wall. I was a bit scared of it but I kept going but then I saw a a a spider and a clown mixed together it was called spound I ran as fast as I could but it chased after me âHELP HELP â I screamed but it got to meâŚâŚâŚ.
Haunted house
This morning I woke up scared.
I wake up every morning scared because my neighbors house is scary. I walked out of my house to do a jog around my block about half I way it started to run as I got back to my house I couldn’t avoid it any longer so I had to go in. As I approached the scary looking door I thought I saw someone looking at me though the window I entered I looked around the corner and saw nothing suddenly I herd a axe being drag around the other corner I turned around BANG I fell slowly to the ground.
Haunted house 2nd draft
This morning I woke up scared.
I wake up every morning scared because my neighbors house is scary. I walked out of my house to do a jog around the block about half way I started to run because it started to rain as I got back to my house I saw my neighbors house I couldn’t avoid it any longer so I had to go in. As I approached the scary looking door I thought I saw someone looking at me though the window I entered I looked around the corner and saw nothing suddenly I herd a axe being drag around the other corner I turned around BANG I fell to floor slowly.
One day I went to the park with my friends when we got there we saw a house that looked haunted. We thought that we should play at the park and then we will come back to the haunted house. We are allowed to be at the park for three hours. We are getting close to the house, it looks scary but I can’t avoid it and I have to go in. But I can’t go in im so scared. I started to walk to the door of the house that looked haunted. I opened the door and…
We stood outside Dante’s house. We had our gear and we were ready to explore The Phantom Manor. It was a big scary building, no one dared to go enter We were waiting on Dante now… After a few minutes he emerged from a couple of bushes. “Finally!” Lincon muttered. Dante glared at him, “It’s not my fault that my mum and dad stay up until 12 o’clock!”. I stared into some bushes, “Never mind. We’re all here now so let’s head.” We walked until they stood outside The Phantom Manor. We had been here before but hadn’t entered. I couldent avoid it any longer, I had to go in.
I tossed and turned in my bed and tried to shut out the noise of the party. Suddenly, I heard a whisper. It was calling my name. I knew I had to follow it. My limbs moved of their own accord. I climbed out of bed. They took me to the open window and stood me up on the windowsill. I jumped out and ran as fast as possible. the ground Then I stopped dead. The oldest house in the street loomed in front of me. It had always attracted me, but tonight I couldn’t avoid it any longer. I had to go in.
I stoped in front of the house and looked at it. I always pass this house when I come and go to places. I wanna know what’s inside the house. Does anyone live there? I opened the gate as it creaked. I felt the neck hair jump up. I slowly walked up to the door. I took a deep breath and knocked on the door. No one answered. I stood there for another 6 minutes. I knocked again I heard th door unlock but it didn’t open. I couldn’t avoid it any longer. I had to go watch in.
One day my friends and and I were walking to the IGA and we always walk past this house and it looked haunted we couldnât hesitate we walked in. Right when we walked in a door slammed and we all got scared, then we heard a person say âleave, leave now or elseâ. We didnât leave we stayed and we walked in the first room and there was a chair covered in blood and next to it was a dead body and then we saw the door slam behind us and it locked we couldnât get out and then we heard the voice say â I told you to leave you didnât now your deadâ.
I was walking home and I saw this haunted house and had the erge to go inside but I didnât because it looked very scary but fun. I walked pass that house 365 times and then I told my brain as my heart is beating and decided I couldnât do it any more I had to go in. As I walked in I saw the ground dropping and unstable I sprinted in to the haunted house so I wouldnât die. I looked outside and say big and small rocks to get back. I was yo tired so I decided to try tomorrow.
I was walking down the road with a few friends and we saw an abandoned two story house.
It was supposed to be abandoned but we all saw a figure standing by the window.
Two of us entered the house.
We both hid in different places but my friend was found and was taken somewhere.
I got my foot stuck in a bear trap but then my other friends came to help free me.
They were opening and closing the bear trap on my leg. I pushed them both into two bear traps.
Then I ran out the house with my friends shouting at me come back, come back you coward!
September 11, 2017 at 2:02 pm
11.00 pm on a Friday night. I was down deep down in the sewage with my best friend. “Why did we think this would be a good idea” I said. We came to a stop when we looked forward there was a dark tunnel with a little bit of light at the end. My friend didn’t get scared and moved forward. She told me to come. I didn’t want to I even thought of just going back but no I knew I couldn’t avoid it anymore I had to go in. To my surprise at the end was a way out
September 11, 2017 at 2:10 pm
The haunted house of milsbury street.
Every Morning on my way to school I walk past the haunted house of milsberry street. Every time I walk past I get an itch on the side of my neck. It is so wired đł. But today was even weirder. I was on my way home when I started to feel like that I was being pulled toward the haunted house. I couldn’t avoid it any longer. Had to go in. The door creeked open, and I stepped inside. The floor cracking underneath me. I almost died in that house today.
September 12, 2017 at 10:21 am
I thought it was good but I thought you could put a bit difficult words.
September 14, 2017 at 9:11 am
Draft #2
The haunted house of milsbury street.
Every Morning on my way to school, I walk past the haunted house of milsberry street. Every time I walk past I get an itch on the side of my neck. It’s just so weird đł. But today was even weirder.
I was on my way homewhen I started to feel like that I was being pulled toward the haunted house. I couldnât avoid it any longer. Had to go in. The door creeked open, and I stepped inside. The floor cracking underneath me. I almost died in that house.
September 14, 2017 at 9:13 am
There is surposed to be a space between home and when
September 11, 2017 at 2:15 pm
As I was walking home I saw this light through the bushes. I walked to the light and saw this creepy, dusty haunted house. As I walked towards the the house I could here whispering and my name being called. All of a sudden i felt a tap on my shoulder it was a little gnome he whispered to me “go in, it will be fine”. Then he disappeared. I did want to go in but it was so creepy. I couldn’t wait any longer I had to go in….
September 11, 2017 at 2:17 pm
I was walking home and I saw this haunted house and had the erge to go inside but I didn’t . Because it looked very scary but fun. I walked pass that house 365 times and then I told my brain and beating heart and decided I couldn’t do it any more I had to go in. As I walked in I saw the ground dropping and unstable I sprinted in to the haunted house so I wouldn’t die. I looked outside and say big and small rocks to get back. I was yo tired so I decided to try tomorrow.
September 11, 2017 at 2:21 pm
It was a cold stormy night but that didn’t stop the two boys from heading to the rickety old house that was believed to be,haunted!. âQuick! This wayâ Josh said as joe ran into another pole. â come on the quicker we get this dare done the quicker we can say we did itâ. âFineâ mumbled joe. Then they ran through a paddock and came to the house. âAlright let’s goâ said josh. â wait I don’t want to!â Said joe. âAwww he’s scaredâ said josh as he ran in. Joe stood there as josh taunted him. He couldnât avoid it any longer. He had to go in. Then, josh disappeared.
September 12, 2017 at 10:18 am
You need to proof read your story because you dont have capital letters and at one point you did !.
September 12, 2017 at 10:25 am
You need a comma in between the words go and said. You need a space in between haunted and the comma.
Thanks
Lily
September 12, 2017 at 10:44 am
It was a cold stormy night but that didn’t stop the two boys from heading to the rickety old house that was believed to be,haunted!. âQuick! This wayâ Josh said as Joe ran into another pole. âCome on the quicker we get this dare done the quicker we can say we did itâ. âFineâ mumbled joe. Then they ran through a paddock and came to the house. âAlright let’s goâ said josh. âWait I don’t want to!â Said joe. âAwww he’s scaredâ said josh as he ran in. Joe stood there as josh taunted him. He couldnât avoid it any longer. He had to go in. Then, josh disappeared.
September 11, 2017 at 2:25 pm
It was cold night and my brother dared me to go inside an abandon house so I went to the front of the house and I turned around I couldn’t avoid it I had to go in. I stepped in the front door and had a little look around And I saw a little black figure that started to grow bigger and bigger and bigger till he was the size of the house it picked me up and opened its mouth I screamed and then I woke up in my cosy bed.
September 14, 2017 at 9:39 am
It was cold night and my brother dared me to go inside an abandon house so I went to the front of the house and I looked back my brother said âgo onâ I looked back around I couldn’t avoid it I had to go in. I stepped in the front door and had a little look around And I saw a little black figure that started to grow bigger and bigger and bigger till he was the size of the house it picked me up and opened its mouth I screamed and then I woke up in my cosy bed.
September 14, 2017 at 9:48 am
It was a cold night and my brother dared me to go inside an abandon house. I went to the front door and I looked back my brother who said âgo onâ! I turned back around I couldn’t avoid it I had to go in. I stepped in the front door and looked around. I saw a little black figure that started to grow bigger and bigger and bigger till he was the size of a ten foot tall giant. It picked me up and opened its mouth I screamed with terror⌠then I woke up in my cosy bed!
September 11, 2017 at 2:29 pm
Once There was a guy called bob he held the record for the world’s most heavy
Man but one day he went to the doctors and they told him he had two weeks to live so he went on a extreme diet and within three months he was finer than a fiddle.
But deep inside him he had a strong urge to eat junk food but he managed to
keep it buried deep inside him until one day he was going out for a run
and a new donut shop had been open he said I couldn’t avoid it any longer I had to go in and so he did and the shop soon closed down because the main customer
Got his title back
September 11, 2017 at 3:39 pm
One day my friends and and I were walking to the Iga and we always walk past this house and it looked haunted we couldn’t hesitate we walked in. Right when we walked in a door slammed and we all got scared, then we heard a person say “leave, leave now or else”. We didn’t leave we stayed and we walked in the first room and there was a chair covered in blood and next to it was a dead body and then we saw the door slam behind us and it locked we couldn’t get out and then we heard the voice say ” I told you to leave you didn’t now your dead”.
September 12, 2017 at 10:19 am
When you say iga it has to be IGA
September 12, 2017 at 10:43 am
You write One day my friends and and I.
September 11, 2017 at 4:15 pm
There is a house on my street made of old decayed wood. The house didn’t seem very stable but it’s still holding up. There were many lifeless trees and grass around. The house is big and deserted. Or at least that’s what some people say. But lately there have Been many people on our street go missing and we had to find them. I think that someone has kidnaped them in the house. If no one checked the house we may never see them again. I couldn’t avoid it any more I had to go in.
September 12, 2017 at 10:24 am
Really interesting but just put a comma between I couldn’t avoid it any more,I had to go in. But other than that it’s great!
September 12, 2017 at 10:32 am
You were very destcripive well done
September 11, 2017 at 6:15 pm
Monday 15/06/17
This weekend I’m staying at my grandparents house, in Warlock. I love going over to their house, but there is this wired house on their street. It’s so creepy and mysterious.
Tuesday. Today I finally arrived at my grandparents house. I’m so excited because I haven’t seen them since Christmas. As I was about to walk the the house I heard this wired sound. I turned around and saw the creepy house. Their was a light that kept flickering and the curtains kept moving. I really wanted to go in but I was to scared. I couldn’t avoid it any longer. I had to go in.
September 12, 2017 at 10:26 am
Good story but there’s one spelling mistake and maybe proof read it after just to make sure it makes sense. But awesome story.
September 12, 2017 at 10:31 am
What does a wired house mean
September 14, 2017 at 9:05 am
I think she meant weird, Zain.
September 11, 2017 at 9:08 pm
One cloudy day I went to school. I was looking forward to going to school because we had fitness the whole day. When I got school there was a new kid. He seamed a little strange. In the first lesson of fitness he looked kinda sad. So I asked him to come with me and play. He started to really like me as a friend. So after woods he invited me to his house. His house looked really creepy and dark. When I got there he was holding a gun. So I quickly ran out. I couldn’t avoid it any longer. I had to go. The next day he quit school. I wondered who he was going to try and murder next. The End
September 12, 2017 at 10:30 am
I couldn’t avoid it any longer. I had to go in. That house I think it’s haunted but I don’t know for sure so I must find out. My curiosity will probably be the death of me. There’s been heaps of rumours but of course I don’t know if they are true or not so I’m going to find out today. As soon as I open the door I hear something. Something like a whisper? I couldn’t make out what it said though. Then there was a loud bang…I should go…
September 12, 2017 at 10:40 am
Once there was a haunted house well that’s what my mum told me. âHi I’m Bob Nonfear i’m only scared of clowns and spiders nothing else well that’s what I thought. until I found that haunted house that my mum was telling me about. I could not help but go in there at first it was not scary until I saw the photo of a clown on the wall. I was a bit scared of it but I kept going but then I saw a a a spider and a clown mixed together it was called spound I ran as fast as I could but it chased after me âHELP HELP â I screamed but it got to meâŚâŚâŚ.
September 12, 2017 at 10:42 am
Haunted house
This morning I woke up scared.
I wake up every morning scared because my neighbors house is scary. I walked out of my house to do a jog around my block about half I way it started to run as I got back to my house I couldn’t avoid it any longer so I had to go in. As I approached the scary looking door I thought I saw someone looking at me though the window I entered I looked around the corner and saw nothing suddenly I herd a axe being drag around the other corner I turned around BANG I fell slowly to the ground.
September 14, 2017 at 9:06 am
Good story, but maybe you could check some grammar and punctuation.
September 14, 2017 at 9:06 am
Haunted house 2nd draft
This morning I woke up scared.
I wake up every morning scared because my neighbors house is scary. I walked out of my house to do a jog around the block about half way I started to run because it started to rain as I got back to my house I saw my neighbors house I couldn’t avoid it any longer so I had to go in. As I approached the scary looking door I thought I saw someone looking at me though the window I entered I looked around the corner and saw nothing suddenly I herd a axe being drag around the other corner I turned around BANG I fell to floor slowly.
September 12, 2017 at 10:43 am
One day I went to the park with my friends when we got there we saw a house that looked haunted. We thought that we should play at the park and then we will come back to the haunted house. We are allowed to be at the park for three hours. We are getting close to the house, it looks scary but I can’t avoid it and I have to go in. But I can’t go in im so scared. I started to walk to the door of the house that looked haunted. I opened the door and…
September 14, 2017 at 9:08 am
There are a few minor errors, but other wise good job.
September 12, 2017 at 10:46 am
We stood outside Dante’s house. We had our gear and we were ready to explore The Phantom Manor. It was a big scary building, no one dared to go enter We were waiting on Dante now… After a few minutes he emerged from a couple of bushes. “Finally!” Lincon muttered. Dante glared at him, “It’s not my fault that my mum and dad stay up until 12 o’clock!”. I stared into some bushes, “Never mind. We’re all here now so let’s head.” We walked until they stood outside The Phantom Manor. We had been here before but hadn’t entered. I couldent avoid it any longer, I had to go in.
September 14, 2017 at 9:09 am
I really like the suspense, but you could check the spelling at some places.
September 14, 2017 at 8:45 am
2000, 1st of January
I tossed and turned in my bed and tried to shut out the noise of the party. Suddenly, I heard a whisper. It was calling my name. I knew I had to follow it. My limbs moved of their own accord. I climbed out of bed. They took me to the open window and stood me up on the windowsill. I jumped out and ran as fast as possible. the ground Then I stopped dead. The oldest house in the street loomed in front of me. It had always attracted me, but tonight I couldn’t avoid it any longer. I had to go in.
108 words
September 14, 2017 at 9:11 am
I stoped in front of the house and looked at it. I always pass this house when I come and go to places. I wanna know what’s inside the house. Does anyone live there? I opened the gate as it creaked. I felt the neck hair jump up. I slowly walked up to the door. I took a deep breath and knocked on the door. No one answered. I stood there for another 6 minutes. I knocked again I heard th door unlock but it didn’t open. I couldn’t avoid it any longer. I had to go watch in.
September 14, 2017 at 9:15 am
One day my friends and and I were walking to the IGA and we always walk past this house and it looked haunted we couldnât hesitate we walked in. Right when we walked in a door slammed and we all got scared, then we heard a person say âleave, leave now or elseâ. We didnât leave we stayed and we walked in the first room and there was a chair covered in blood and next to it was a dead body and then we saw the door slam behind us and it locked we couldnât get out and then we heard the voice say â I told you to leave you didnât now your deadâ.
September 14, 2017 at 9:17 am
Skylah
I was walking home and I saw this haunted house and had the erge to go inside but I didnât because it looked very scary but fun. I walked pass that house 365 times and then I told my brain as my heart is beating and decided I couldnât do it any more I had to go in. As I walked in I saw the ground dropping and unstable I sprinted in to the haunted house so I wouldnât die. I looked outside and say big and small rocks to get back. I was yo tired so I decided to try tomorrow.
September 14, 2017 at 10:03 am
I was walking down the road with a few friends and we saw an abandoned two story house.
It was supposed to be abandoned but we all saw a figure standing by the window.
Two of us entered the house.
We both hid in different places but my friend was found and was taken somewhere.
I got my foot stuck in a bear trap but then my other friends came to help free me.
They were opening and closing the bear trap on my leg. I pushed them both into two bear traps.
Then I ran out the house with my friends shouting at me come back, come back you coward!