In week three we had a look at creating News Articles in preparation for our blogging task, these are the works we created during the workshop.
In week three we had a look at creating News Articles in preparation for our blogging task, these are the works we created during the workshop.
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October 31, 2017 at 8:47 am
CRIMINAL RAMPAGE
There is a criminal rampage on the streets of America. A man with gun and bombs has blown up houses and buildings and is on the run and taking hostages in the back of white van. Police do not know his whereabouts. He is loaded with dangerous weapons. We will keep you updated as this man is on the run. Now I have Eliza who is giving us some information on his past.Police have identified this man as Jake Christopher. He has had a pretty shaky past and has murdered his own parents when he was 16. He has the lived on the streets by himself stealing food to survive. Thank you for the information Eliza.
We know talk to a witness of this rampage. John can you tell us about this man’s description. He is a tall skinny man. He is wearing a full black jumpsuit. That is all I could see. What was this man doing. He was driving down the streets crashing into people around the street thank you for this information.
We have just heard that this man has been captured on Williams street and is being taken to Jail by police.
October 31, 2017 at 9:03 am
Good story just maybe at the end don’t say that he has been captured as it creates more suspense and readers will want to read the next copy
October 31, 2017 at 10:57 am
You’ve crafted an exciting event, however your writing reads more like a second person narrative or the script for a televised news broadcast than an article that a person might read in the newspaper or online.
Removing yourself from the story (adjusting phrases such as ‘we now talk to a witness..’ and ‘we will keep you updated’) and adopting the conventions we discussed when looking at the examples this morning will help to provide a more formal structure
October 31, 2017 at 8:48 am
New discovery of a new species of a shark…
Marine biologist have discovered the most feared, shark that you could think of. It has 15 layers of sharp teeth and is 30 ft long. They live in the Antarctic and eat Killer whales. The scientists have discovered that they have round about 5 out of 7 eggs. They don’t know what to call but for now they are giving a code name is 1269. They just discovered that there blood is cure for many diabetes. This could change the world in a big way.
The place they have looked and searched in the antarctic show that one tenth is filled with babies,teenagers and fully grown adults of this creature. The are the colour black green and purple.
Doctor phil has said that this could be a life changing event. “ we could help and cure the people of the world” he said he works at marine world university.
This creature will not harm you if you don’t. The doctor will give out more information after more research and figuring out its name.
People are welcome to give a suggestion for the name @Dr Philmarine word university.com
October 31, 2017 at 9:05 am
Awesome story 🦄 I love how you make it realistic
October 31, 2017 at 11:00 am
You have followed the conventions of a written news article well here, with a clear lead, background information and interview section, well done.
October 31, 2017 at 8:48 am
Child gets found
The child’s name is bob, bob got lost in the city while mum was going to get sushi. But two years later found behind rubbish bin eaten stolen pizza. Now mum taking care of the child and put him under blankets in his bed. The doctors took some tests and said he was the healthiest kid in the world and it’s a MIRACLE.
The doctors test were checking his diet and blood doctors ask if he’d donate a kidney he said no thanks and the doctor said why because their mine.
Now we have his Mum with us. We just asked what it’s like to have a kid who been through this. She responded very dramatic and sad but now we have him resting.
Bob has a brother and he just fell off his motorcycle and is in hospital with nasty grazes.
But now mum happy for one son and sad for the other and on the 29/2/20 they both were reunited with each other.
October 31, 2017 at 8:49 am
My news article:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/131ZBApjMF-OAYQpI-52-2sXAygxBijIlyu4G3EKTWtY
October 31, 2017 at 8:50 am
12 year old Millionaire
12 year old boy becomes a millionaire overnight.All he did was go to bingo and get a ticket he played with his Mum. While they were playing he was getting bored he started dabbing and then got bingo. Then he yelled out “ BINGO” when they came and checked the ticket they found that he won the jackpot and that jackpot had not been won since 1799 the present Time was 2017. That jackpot has been building up and up and up until today. The jackpot had 90 million in it all the kids thought he was so lucky. So we talked to the boy’s mother she was just as happy as the boy but when we asked her what the money would go towards she said “ all the money will be going towards a holiday,car,mansion and presents towards our boy.”
Latter we saw them at the shop with no child then we found the boy he was trapped in a janitor’s closet. We talked to the boy and he said that his Mum and dad put him in here we talked a bit more to the boy and the Told the police. The police took care of the boy and his parents. The police said they are not your parents these are. “So I was kidnaped by two strangers”
“That’s what it looks like”said the policeman.
They put the kidnappers in jail the boy got all his money back and his proper parents were found and reunited with there boy.
October 31, 2017 at 8:51 am
One day a random man came to visit Woodend Primary School but nobody knew who he is.
When some teachers saw the man with a knife the school went into lockdown. He looked really creepy. He was all dressed in black.
When all the students got to their classroom, the teachers called the police. When the teachers called the police they said “ you have to come to Woodend right now! There’s a man with a knife.
When the police came they got the man and took him away. Nobody knew what he was going to do. Some people thought he was looking for someone, some people thought he was a murder. When they took the man to the police station he said he had mental health problems.
The End
October 31, 2017 at 8:53 am
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FxHr70MHxRKQUJXPPKK_hMvdCTCf3sOWHniwfYuAZ4c
October 31, 2017 at 8:54 am
“Good Evening I’m Edward leavy and welcome to the Non weekender we begin with news that there is a massive fire ripping through the city the firefighters believe that it was started by a boy named zico he was trying to put out a fire with a fire lighter which is very strange. We will hear from him later, we are at the hospital where zico is the police believe he is in a stable condition but they believe he did not act alone. Over to Ethan” “ thanks Edward I’ve got a Witness called Isaiah so Isaiah what happened here” “well I was a sleep in the park and I woke up and there were three other people in black jumpers they first lit the fire then one of them kept reliving the fire which was strange” “that’s all thanks” since that interview the other people have been arrested the motive was to destroy all rubbish.
October 31, 2017 at 8:55 am
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GXKq5VRmn7fkKOvSLa2ovMd_WtGAsySilXhrWynOHAA/edit
October 31, 2017 at 8:56 am
New best player in our team….
We have just started training and our team looks pretty good but there is one girl who looks new to the club and there is one problem does she fit into our team. The game comes and this new girl is amazing she fits in so well my mum is so amazed our team is going to go a long way this season.
This one girl is going to have a good season with us she fits in so well and my mum is so amazed. There is a lady who is talking to mum and she thinks our team will stay the same and no one will get put down a team.
Annie said “ this is going to be a good season i am so excited the new girl is so amazing she got put in the right team” good to know that you are happy” said the interview person.
We are in our 3 quarter and we have found out that the new girl plays WA/GA/GS and C my mum is so happy with the positions she plays.Here we go again let’s win this game
This new girl made us win I am so happy with the new girl and I have made good friends with her now we just have to win the rest of the games
October 31, 2017 at 9:08 am
You need to add capitals and full stops also after a full stop it needs a space and then the first word.
October 31, 2017 at 8:57 am
https://docs.google.com/document/d/10ffFe_HhQtmgnWzhVerPXBB2SRzxEV-tkkHXIjZUhdc
October 31, 2017 at 8:58 am
Famous Not Famous?
You know that famous girl that says she is lives in L.A and she was born in Paris. Well that is all a lie, I caught up with her to find out the real story behind her life. Her name is Sierra Von Burch, she is 23 years old and actually she was born in a little country town by the name of Bombala.
You might ask why she lied and made up these stories well that’s why I’m here.
As I said before Her name is Sierra Von Burch, she is 23 years old and actually she was born in a little country town by the name of Bombala. Sierra’s Mum died when she was little and Sierra’s dad lives with her stepmom in Venezuela, Brazil. I asked why she made up lies and she said something about a deal her parents made and how she needed to keep her identity a secret. As I dug deeper she blabbering on and blurted out something about royalty.
I tried to dig deeper and she said that when she was little her parents did something bad to the queen, and they made a deal that when they had their first child the queen would get to adopt her. The queen told her the story on her 21st birthday. I asked why she is now in L.A and she explained that she had made the same deal with the queen as her parents did.
October 31, 2017 at 9:00 am
African bear almost dies from mysterious illness.
Last week in the Kologha Forest an explorer spots a gigantic African bear with a whopping 3 meter long tongue hanging from its mouth. The explorer attempted to get a closer look but was stopped by the slashing of another. The explorer retreated back to his tent and hid under the old wood bench.
Gahunda Was the explorer who found the bear along with his friend Mr vangundi the 3rd. There was no information of any other individuals when the bear was spotted.
We interviewed Mahamid Gahunda and he told us “ the bear was as skinny as a thick twig and it’s tongue looked like a massive red balloon that had been chewed up, swallowed and had been spat out and blown up again”
The bear was rushed straight to the vet surgery after its discovery. The veterinarian that saved this poor bear was the award winning professor R.M Ripley.
The African bear is in a safe enclosure and is being watched by other professors and its tongue has been put back to its original size.
October 31, 2017 at 9:01 am
My news article
https://docs.google.com/document/d/177PfyvzQqsWuFMQU2lRAHP1NeYJ3v1uqCFt6kMQX6W4
October 31, 2017 at 9:02 am
https://docs.google.com/document/d/19KhIbg3JjCukFK7aFZB2cHlQCZiMy4OYchtTlTlkc-E
October 31, 2017 at 9:03 am
My secret millionaire twin.
Today I found out I had a secret twin. It turns out that she’s a millionaire and she lives in New York. I met her at the mall about two days ago. This is how it started. After my parents had myself and my sister. They decided to keep me and send my twin away. They only wanted one child and decided keep healthy child. I went to the hospital where I born and asked the nurse about my twin she said “your parents were only aloud to keep one baby as they had committed a crime about 2 months before you were born”. I spent a whole day finding information about my twin. Her name is Aria Faye. She’s 18, same age as me and she lives in New York. Did I mention she’s a millionaire. I also found out that she use to live in a small town in Australia in Ballarat. Her foster parents were both actors. 4 years later they moved to New York for more acting jobs. 2 years later her parents died in a car crash. She was 16 when that happened. By then she learnt how to look after herself. The next day I did some more digging and found out her email. She didn’t respond back though. A week later I found a letter in my letterbox. I opened the letter and found a plane ticket to New York. On the back it said from Aria Faye.
October 31, 2017 at 1:17 pm
Shopping centre shootout
a family walked into the shopping centre to get something for dinner to eat they were getting some steak and vegetables. And there was this weird person walking around with something in hand It looked like a gun and then They heard gunshots the guy that appeared to be shooting has Been taking drugs since he was 12 and now he is 26. Now we have got the family to come in and talk about what happened the family said it was scary and we ran about of the shopping centre as fast as we could and it was the scary stuff thing of their lives. The guy that was shooting has been arrested for 6 months.
November 1, 2017 at 11:57 am
Mysterious Arrival
A wreck passenger ship was found on the south coast of Adelaide. Archeologists have said the boat had first set sail in 1912 right after the titanic sunk. The boat was going to though the North Atlantic Ocean exactly where the titanic hit the iceberg.
Louise Davison, Sally Hudson and Mike Jolson have been researching about the ship.
“There’s not much hints to show what has happened to this mysterious ship so this is going to take some time to work out what it’s been through” -Sally Hudson
“This may take some time to find out what has happened to this wrecked ship but we will keep going with our research” -Louise Davison
“Exactly what Sally and Louise it will take a bit of time but it doesn’t mean we can’t continue researching.” -Mike Jolson
“When will we get more answers?” You might be asking. They are hoping each time they find new data they will report it to the public as soon as possible.