This week we are approaching our 100 word challenge a bit differently. Instead of posting your first draft and then all of your re-crafted work, we are ONLY posting our FINAL versions. This week, we have designed a single point rubric to guide our learning and you will work within your feedback group to edit and refine your writing before you publish. Once you are happy with your finished work, please post it as a comment below.
June 19, 2017 at 9:32 am
Lucinda and I stood in the elevator as it went up. We didn’t say a word. All I could think about was how much I was going to miss her and our memories. When we got to the third floor we got out the elevator and walked to the boarding station. Everyone who was going to Texas had started boarding.
“It’s time to go now” I said as tears welled up in my eyes.
“Yeah it is” Said Lucinda looking down.
I hugged her tightly and she hugged me back even more tightly.
“I hope we see each other soon” Said Lucinda with a smile.
“Yeah hopefully” I said.
June 19, 2017 at 9:33 am
I was walking my pet dog Nugget then I see a guy walking all weird and at first I thought that he had too much alcohol but then I see a gun in his hand so I start sprinting with my dog as he goes a physico killing spree I look back and all I can see is blood and I Can just hear terrible screams and gunshots and I can start to hear police sirens as well. The cops saved me and my dog but sadly have to shoot the guy with the gun. I saw that as tears welled up in my eyes.
June 19, 2017 at 9:34 am
100 Word Challenge
One night I was walking with my uncle. He told me about his childhood and what he did. When we were walking his phone started to ring it was from the doctors and that he had cancer. My uncle and I suddenly stop has tears weld our eyes. We didn’t talk for a couple of minutes I said in my head “Enjoy the time you have with him and there is a chance he can survive”. I kept saying it in my head, all I was doing was hoping for him to survive.
June 19, 2017 at 9:35 am
Ethan and Jesse heard a loud bang we went to the front door there was a zombie and we were scared I ran for my life out the back door and there was zombies everywhere. We were thinking of a way to fix it, We had an idea it was to go to the science lab and get one off the scientist to make a gun that will shoot them all to humans again. We were just about to enter the science lab when a zombie jumped on jesse and ate him up tears welled up in my eyes I was so sad he was my best friend. I got to the science and shot all of the zombies back to human to be continued………
June 19, 2017 at 9:37 am
One day a man named Edward drove over to an abandoned shed. In there was his favourite car a dodge demon. He was shocked to see the car because It wasn’t even released yet so he drove over to the gas station to fill it up. On the way he could feel the wind through his hair. When he got to the gas station he drove over to fill it up. He got out of the car and filled his car up, then he walked into the gas station and paid for his gas he looks out the window to see a man with a cigaret lighter and blows the car up and tears welled up in his eyes as the car burned.
The end
June 19, 2017 at 9:38 am
A tear swell up in my eye
Once upon a time there lived a little boy named Daniel he was a little brat he always wanted everything in the world. At school he was even more of a brat until one day. Daniel was home alone and he was watching tv thinking that his family was not nice and then. The tv turned off Daniel was not scared until he saw a ghost when the light went out. He walked around the house and went into his bedroom. Then he saw his sister on the floor dead he was truly scared.
June 19, 2017 at 9:41 am
Tears welled up in my eyes
One day I was playing with Aiden my best friend he has brown eyes and hair. He said to me,
“I’m moving to America for ever”
I honestly thought Aiden was tricking me but he wasn’t. He is going to leave next Friday. Aiden said that he talked about where they were going to live and the school that he was going to. When he was talking about it as tears welled up in my eyes. If Aiden got to choose he would never leave because he loves playing with me. The thing that we both want to do is Skype everyday. On thursday we are having a class party.
June 19, 2017 at 9:43 am
My baby cousin
Dear diary
Right now I am in the new Queen Elizabeth hospital.
We are in the pregnancy ward.
My new baby cousin is being born today! I can’t wait to see her tiny little fingers and toes. There are lots of doctors running around. I hear a loud screech coming from the room in front of me. My Uncle comes out to get me and says “Do you want to meet your new cousin?” I ran into the room and right in front of me I see my new baby cousin. My Auntie hands her to me and tears welled up in my eyes.
June 19, 2017 at 9:45 am
once the was a stray girl, she is poor with only with 5c and had bare dirty feet like a hobbit. she live for five months without gobsmacking food and perfectly clear water. On her birthday , the 3rd of May. The stray girl was lurking for any hope, just for anything. Then she saw something rectangular, she bent down to see and it $5. She picked up and saw a shop in the rainy,foggy weather and she ran to it. It was a doughnut store. She went into the heated store and bought a chocolate doughnut, it was the best doughnut on her life, tears welled up in her eyes.
June 19, 2017 at 9:47 am
Red balloons
I woke up red balloons flying around in every direction my eyes welled up with tears.I had lost my parents and I was at the races. suddenly Somebody grabbed my hand and pulled me into a shiny red car. The car seemed new. And I saw that it was a man that had taken me. He wore a shiny black coat as black as the night sky and some strange bright pink shoes his hair was slick and pulled Back. I pulled as hard as I could on the car door but it wouldn’t budge. After a while I gave up after that the car was silent.
June 19, 2017 at 9:48 am
Sorry spelling error here is the real one
June 19, 2017 at 9:47 am
Tears welled up In my eyes
I saw a traffic jam. I walked up along side of the cars until I got to the end and saw a car that had, an accident. I raced to the car helping the man out the car.I got the man out the car and he had scars all over his face. Some how the emergency people got here.They did a test to find out who he was. The doctors came up to me and said we have bad news we didn’t have his facial recognition so they did a test and said he was my brother. Tears welled down my eyes.
June 19, 2017 at 9:48 am
I was sitting on the couch when I got a phone call. I reached over to grab it, my eyes were glued to the tv. I put the phone to my ear, “Hello?” I said. No response, I turned the volume down. “Hello?” The person on the end of the line was still there. Then a few seconds later, he spoke. He sounded serious, “Oh yes hello. My name is Todd Stetson. And I’m calling you to talk about something very tragic. I nodded, “What happened?” He sighed… . “Y-your mother and father were in a car crash.” Tears welled up in my eyes. “I see..” I put down the phone.
June 19, 2017 at 9:52 am
I woke up, I ran down the stairs I flicked on the tv I put the sound to max. I got my bell and ringing it I Walked into my mum and Dad’s room. I started jumping mhpg them I told them to get out of bed I was hungry.
They made a bacon Sandwich I got ready and just I was about to leave for school I fell down the stairs it all went black.
I woke up tears welled up in my eyes. there were hundreds upon hundreds of gold coins then I closed up the gap and never told anyone.
The end.
June 19, 2017 at 9:55 am
One lovely day I was getting ready for school when mum said it was time to go to school. “But I don’t want to go to school because there is someone at school that is hurting my feelings” said Mackenzie,
her mum said “you have to go to school but just do not let her bully you, stay strong Mackenzie”
“ok i’ll go” said Mackenzie
So off they went they started to walk but when they were walking the mean girl drove past and gave mackenzie lots of mean looks, tears welled up in my eyes they were running down my cheek and they dropped onto my clothing so slowly
June 19, 2017 at 9:57 am
Tears Welled Down From My Eyes
One day I went up to the park with my friend John. When we got the park John asked me if I wanted to play basketball with him. So I did. After we played basketball we went onto the monkey bars. We both tried to do tricks on them. I went on first. When I went I fell off. My arm really hurt so I went back home with John. We went to the doctors to see if it was broken. It was broken and tears welled down from my eyes. They told me I had to wear a cast for 6 weeks and I couldn’t play sports. The End
June 19, 2017 at 10:01 am
I was at my house sitting on the couch watching my favourite TV show. Everything was fine until I picked up the phone. It was a very professional sounding guy and he said that his parents had been in a car crash and are in a very critical state and may die. I hung up on the phone and I started going to the hospital because it was only a kilometer down the hill. When I arrived I asked if the nurse could take me to my parents. She took me up the stairs and into a room where my parents were. Tears welled up in my eyes.
June 19, 2017 at 10:02 am
‘Man the grill’! Yelled cook as the grill started to set the burgers on fire because SOMEONE left the grill unmanned while they did something else. I leapt into action.
I grabbed two flannels and a fire blanket and threw the blanket on the grill and then fanned it down with the flannels. ‘Got it!’ I yelled. The fire was so hot my eyes welled up with tears. As I was fanning the fire I didn’t see that the whole bench set on fire and it spreaded through half the kitchen. Everyone was screaming and people were panicking. I felt I was going to suffocate. Then I blacked out.
June 19, 2017 at 10:06 am
100 Word Challenge
Me and everyone were at the hospital sitting with my grandma it was her final moments. The whole family was there watching her in sadness. Everyone’s eyes were filling up with tears. Then the monitor turned off. She had passed away. Tears welled up in my eyes. The nurses took her away as we headed to hungry jacks. I didn’t feel hungry at all after all of that. After we went home. We were all crying so all of us went to bed. This was the worst day of my life by far.
June 20, 2017 at 9:13 am
It was a good story but at the beginning you made a mistake.
June 19, 2017 at 10:09 am
Tears welled up in my eyes as I stared at the contents of the large reed basket I was carrying. Three shiny dragon eggs glistened in its depths. I knew I’d come across an abandoned nest of young sooner or later, but it still shook my soul. I wiped my eyes on my sleeve. I had to stay strong. Taking a deep breath to steady myself, I began walking across the hard ground, my heart exploding with sorrowful agony with each step. The eggs were heavy, and It was a long walk back to the village I called home. But it was the only safe place for dragonlings anymore.
June 19, 2017 at 10:12 am
Today is the day that my parents leave. They are going to move to new country for work. I’ll be staying with my uncle. I won’t see them for a very long time. At least five years possibly even 6… I will miss them very much. So very much. They are heading onto the plane now. I just said my goodbyes. I look away. Tears welled up in my eyes. They are cold on my cheek. I am so upset. I just can’t even believe that I won’t see them in 5 years. I just can’t…there’s no way…
June 20, 2017 at 9:08 am
I was walking home from a friends house it was only 20 minutes walk it was 10:38 p.m, “ring,ring”. It was my phone it was dad. “Hello, what’s happened?” I asked my dad.” Your grandpa has died because of a heart attack.”” I don’t understand he was perfectly fine.”” I know it was just sudden.” Tears welled up in my eyes my grandpa and I were so close we used to go for bike rides every Saturday but now he was gone. The End.
June 20, 2017 at 9:22 am
Tears welled up in my eyes I can’t believe what I just witnessed. I can’t believe my husbands gone all because of a single bullet that his best friend shot. The worst part is I had to watch the whole thing hearing my husband screaming in pain and agony while his friend just laughed at him telling him he is weak and he deserved it. After he died his friend walked up to me and said
“Don’t tell anyone or I will have to feed you your husbands guts and a glass of his blood”.
“I don’t know what to do I am scared” she said.
To be continued