This week we are focussing on using language to describe the setting of the story. What words would you use to describe the scene in the picture? Remember that a 100 Word Challenge doesn’t need to be a full story, it only needs to be a section of a story. Concentrate on describing THIS scene well.
March 27, 2017 at 8:42 am
Caught in a storm
I was driving home in my red Ferrari on a Friday night. The clouds had been black for a while now I’m just hoping I get home before the storm starts. The weather lady gave us a heads up and I took the chance to get home. I could just see some rain coming and thunder coming. It was getting closer quickly. Now I was under the rain it was pouring down the roof of my Ferrari was being pounded. I was caught in a storm. But luckily I just realised I was on my street I quickly parked my car and ran inside.
March 27, 2017 at 8:44 am
Draft one
I woke up and got my roller skates and rolled out the house. I was near the road and I felt a little bit of rain, but i thought in my head ‘ it’s fine, it is just rain’ . So I went to the park and the rain was gone . I was getting bored so I headed back home . The sky was grey , and I was in the middle of the road and then a big storm just hit and I was losing control of my wheels and feel and a car was coming , so I crawled to safety and I was just in luck the car saw me . Few…
March 27, 2017 at 8:44 am
My 100 word challenge draft one
I was riding my bike across an old boardwalk in Japan when a gust of wind blew past sending my bike flying in the air, it landed with a loud crack. It smashed into pieces a few meters away from me. I was lucky that I didn’t get hit. It started hailing all around. Massive ice cubes were hitting me in the face as hard as possible. The wind grew stronger nearly knocking me off my feet. I couldn’t move I was caught in a storm. I was so scared, I didn’t know what to do. A wave came smashing onto the board walk. I was drowning within seconds……
March 27, 2017 at 8:51 am
I really like all the description in your story and I like how you built up suspens.
March 27, 2017 at 8:44 am
“I was on my family boat when we heard screams coming from the shore”.
“Um Jeff” said my dad
“What” said Jeff
“I think I know why there screaming”
“I turned around and couldn’t believe my eyes it was the biggest wave I’ve ever seen and I was coming straight at us, i ran straight to the steering wheel and went full speed straight at it so it wouldn’t collapse on us”.
“I think that we’re going to make it,” said my dad
“but we saw it collapsing from the left we and it was at that moment we knew it was
late”.
April 3, 2017 at 9:45 am
Draft two
“I was on my family boat when we heard screams coming from the shore”.
“Um Jeff” said my dad
“What” said Jeff
“I think I know why there screaming”
“I turned around and couldn’t believe my eyes it was the biggest wave I’ve ever seen and I was coming straight at us, i ran up the stairs to the straight to the steering wheel and went full speed straight at it so it wouldn’t collapse on us”.
“I think that we’re going to make it,” said my dad
“but we saw it collapsing from the left we and it was at that moment we knew it was
late”.
March 27, 2017 at 8:44 am
“Aaahhhh!” I screamed as I fell down the bike track onto the concrete below. The wind was so strong in this storm. I’ll never get home. Just then a huge wave smashed over the balistrate and hit me. I knew I shouldn’t have gone for a morning ride along the beach this morning. The storm just came out of nowhere. There were still people on the beach running frantically. Then another wave hit and dragged another thirty people out to sea. Then a rock hit me and I blacked out. I came to on a street about 10 metres away infront of my house. Then I went inside. The end.
March 27, 2017 at 8:45 am
The wind was blowing and the clouds were dark. Sandy and Alex live close to the beach so they were riding their bikes on the way home. They were riding and they saw the waves crashing onto the beach.
“I think it’s about to rain.” Said Sandy
“You think so?” Asked Alex
“ Yeah definitely.” Sandy said answering his question
“If you think that it’s going to rain we should get home then.” Alex said still not convinced
“Yes, let’s go.” Sandy ordered him
“Ok.” Alex said
10 minutes later the rain started to fall on Alex told Sandy that she was right, at least home was around the corner.
April 3, 2017 at 9:37 am
The wind was blowing and the clouds were dark. Sandy and Alex live close to the beach so they were riding their bikes on the way home. They were riding and they saw the waves crashing onto the beach.
“I think it’s about to rain.” Said Sandy
“You think so?” Asked Alex
“ Yeah definitely.” Sandy said answering his question
“If you think that we are going to b caught in a storm then w should get home.” Alex said still not convinced
“Yes, let’s go.” Sandy ordered him
“Ok.” Alex said
10 minutes later the rain started to fall, and Alex told Sandy that she was right, at least home was around the corner.
April 3, 2017 at 9:42 am
Well done Jorja for picking up what you did wrong in your first draft to your second draft, well done with your speech
March 27, 2017 at 8:46 am
One storm day a girl called bellah was taking a walk in the storm when suddenly bellah saw a person caught in the storm she was shouting “i’m caught in a storm help me please” so bellah said” how did you get stuck in the storm”
the girl said “ I was taking a walk to my friends house to catch up and when bang I was stuck in the storm I have been there since 8:30 in the morning”
oh here I’ll help you what do you want me to do and what is your name” said bellah
“My name is Chloe, grab my hand and pull please” said the girl
so bellah grabbed Chloe’s and pulled and finally she was free
April 3, 2017 at 9:58 am
One storm day a girl called bellah was taking a walk in the storm when suddenly bellah saw a person caught in the storm she was shouting “i’m caught in a cyclone. help me please” so bellah said” how did you get stuck in the storm”
the girl said “ I was taking a walk to my friends house to catch up and when bang I was stuck in a cyclone.I have been there since 8:30 in the morning”
oh here I’ll help you what do you want me to do and what is your name” said bellah
“My name is Chloe, grab my hand and pull please” said the girl
so bellah grabbed Chloe’s hand and pulled and finally she was free
March 27, 2017 at 8:50 am
The storm
Wind is rushing in and out of my ears my hair is in my face I’m soaking wet and freezing cold. I feel faint my whole world is disappearing, And suddenly I see a light my hands and feet aching I pull my self towards the light. Suddenly I start to fall I scream. I seem to fall forever until I hit the hard wet and cold ground. I am in a big wet cold cave. I hear lightning I am not going back out there. I crawl further and further into the cave feeling weaker and weaker each step. I’m scared I won’t make it out alive…
March 27, 2017 at 8:51 am
Late one August night there was a massive storm. The only thing you could see was the lightning flashing and knocking down trees and the water that reflected the light from the lightning. Everyone in the town had evacuated except for one man. For this man it was to late because he was caught in the storm. There was no way for him to leave because the storm would get to him and the lightning would kill him so there was no hope for him anymore. There was no hope in him being alive when its over but we could only hope.
March 27, 2017 at 8:52 am
I started to walk down a street and suddenly I got caught in a storm. The trees were blowing everywhere brunches were snapping off and finally I saw it…
A massive tornado and it was coming straight towards me I tried to run but it’s like I wasn’t even moving so I turned around and ran into the tornado and then I screamed I’m still ALIVE and it felt like nothing was happening it was so calm then I thought I’m in the tornado’s eye. I looked around and saw a bright green gem I grabbed it and then the tornado disappeared.
THE END
April 3, 2017 at 10:01 am
Draft 2 . I started to walk down a street and suddenly I felt a brush of wind I turned around and trees were blowing everywhere brunches were snapping off and finally I saw it…
A massive tornado and it was coming straight towards me I tried to run but it’s like I wasn’t even moving so I turned around and ran into the tornado then I screamed… I’m still ALIVE and it felt like nothing was happening then I thought am I in the tornado’s eye. I looked around and saw a bright green gem. I grabbed it. Then the tornado disappeared and then I ran back to my house as fast as I could.
March 27, 2017 at 8:52 am
Caught in a storm
On the 7th of july 1986 I was surfing in the rain but it was very hot. About 2 hours later a big storm came there was lightning, thunder and rain at the same time there was gushing wind and I couldn’t get out of a rip and it took me 12 meters out to sea. It was still taking me out to sea. I was so luck to get out of the rip because a shark was following me than the stormed stopped and i went home to my family. The next day I was shocked.
April 3, 2017 at 9:37 am
Good story, I was so luck to get out of the rip. It doesn’t make sense so change luck to lucky then it will make sense
April 3, 2017 at 9:40 am
I like the story of how you went surfing and was taken out to sea. The part when you said I was so luck I didn’t get how but I liked the story though
April 3, 2017 at 9:48 am
Caught in a storm 2nd Draft
On the 7th of july 1986 I was surfing in the rain but it was very hot. About 2 hours later a big storm came there was lightning, thunder and rain at the same time there was gushing wind and I couldn’t get out of a rip and it took me 12 meters out to sea. It was still taking me out to sea. I was so lucky to get out of the rip because a shark was following me than the stormed stopped and i went home to my family. The next day I was shocked
March 27, 2017 at 8:53 am
I walked out to my garage and grabbed my bike, then I reached over for my helmet. I put my helmet on and pushed off my bike.
Soon enough I was gliding down Chaple Hill towards my best friends house. She was standing outside smiling at me as I pulled up.
“Hi!” She said
“Hey, let’s go.” I said
We rode down the main rode and before we knew it we were at the beach, we slowly passed other riders until we stopped under a tree. It had started to rain,
“Today wasn’t the best day to come riding!” She said
“I agree, because we were caught in a storm.”
April 3, 2017 at 9:46 am
I think that there could have been a bit more spelling that makes sense. Ather wise I still think that there could have been a bit more spelling. But the story was coming out well enough that I can read it.
March 27, 2017 at 8:55 am
Into the storm
One day me and and my friend Nic were riding our bikes over to the den. We were on our way up the hill when it starts to rain but we keep going. Later it started to get heavy and started to get foggy “we should go back” I say. But Nic just keeps going. Later on it’s now pouring and thundering but were too high up the mountain now to turn back but that’s when it happened a lightning strike hits the mountain just in front of Nic. I race up to see if he is ok he is fine but his bike is wrecked we look up and there’s the den
April 3, 2017 at 9:38 am
Into a storm draft 2
One day my friend Nic and I were riding our bikes over to the den. We were on our way up the hill when it started to rain but we keep going. Later it started to get heavier and started to get foggy “we should go back” I say. But Nic just keeps going. Later on it’s now pouring and thundering but were too high up the mountain now to turn back but that’s when it happened a lightning strike hits the mountain just in front of Nic. I race up to see if he is ok he is fine but his bike is wrecked we look up and there’s the den
The end
March 27, 2017 at 8:55 am
Verity and I laughed and carried on with our conversations and Jupiter barked with very sentence we said. We stopped and looked at each other and Jupiter sat down looking at us.
“Did you make me that sound?” Asked Verity.
“What sound?” I Asked looking all confused.
“That sou-” Said Verity
“RUN” I asked grabbing Verity arm and pulling her.
We were caught in a storm! Jupiter barked and ran with us. All you could here was people screaming and the sky rumbling.
“Quick to the fish and chip shop!” Shouted Verity and pull me towards there.
“Yes” I Said
April 3, 2017 at 9:42 am
Second Draft
Verity and I laughed and carried on with our conversation while Jupiter barked with very sentence we said. We stopped and looked at each other and Jupiter sat down looking at us.
“Did you make me that sound?” Asked Verity.
“What sound?” I Asked looking all confused.
“That sou-” Said Verity
“RUN” I shouted grabbing Verity arm and pulling her.
We were caught in a storm! Jupiter barked and ran with us. All you could hear was people screaming and the sky rumbling.
“Quick to the fish and chip shop!” Shouted Verity and pull me towards there.
“Yes” I Said
March 27, 2017 at 8:56 am
Caught in a storm
I was walking down a sidewalk and the cars were going crazy. Everyone was boarding up their windows because of the Syclone. The Syclone was starting to hit so I raced home only to find out that nobody was home. The Syclone was coming faster so I ran out the back door too the backyard. I looked up and saw my bike flying away. So I picked up my dog and my iPad. I jumped into the underground bunker. So I put sandbags in front of the bunker so that the Syclone would not get in the bunker….
March 27, 2017 at 8:57 am
Week nine 100 word challenge
“Hi I’m D as my friends call me.So I’m here to talk about a storm that I was court in once. In my books it was far bigger than I remember but here we go. So once it was a windy night all the trees looked like they where going to fall over and I had to go pick up my kid from OSHC. I hoped in to my car and gess what my car won’t start. So I had to walk I grabbed my umbrella and started to walk to OSHC.my umbrella trend inside out a tornado came and…”said D
March 27, 2017 at 8:58 am
100 Word Challenge
It was a windy and stormy night. I was outside caught in a storm. I was all alone stuck in the middle of a farm where there was no one. I was so scared, there was no shelter anywhere. I thought this was going to be the end of my terrific life. Then I saw someone in the distance. I yelled “hello help me” they just turned away. Then I knew it was over, I started herding lighting and see thunder. After I was on the floor dead.
March 27, 2017 at 8:59 am
I decided to go out on my bike I was riding next to the beach when I realised that no one was around and all the houses had sandbags at the front of them then the clouds started to get darker and I heard thunder and saw humongous living strikes it was like the gods were fuming. I realised that I was caught in a storm.
I ran for cover their was sand everywere and I ran for cover but all the houses were locked.then a tornado appeared and I when the flying in the air.
TO BE CONTINUED…
March 27, 2017 at 8:59 am
I was caught in a storm
One day I was riding my bike to school and it started spitting with rain.
The rain started getting bigger and bigger and then it started hailing and snowing and I couldn’t keep control of my bike and I fell off and broke my arm on a big rock in the middle of the road and I almost got run over by a car.
Eventually an Ambulance
Ance came and I went to hospital and got a cast and then I went home and slept for 2 hours. Once I woke up my arm was hurting a lot and in pain.
March 27, 2017 at 9:03 am
100 Word Challenge
One day Ethan came around to my house and asked me “ do you want to come for a bike ride with me “. I said
“sure “. So off we went. We rode on the foot path right next to the beach. Suddenly a storm came. Ethan and I had no idea what to do. So we just rode as fast as we could back home. When we got home we watched a movie and made cubby houses, while watching the storm. The End
March 27, 2017 at 9:03 am
One stormy day Ethan and bob were inside watching a movie because it was so stormy. After the movie we decided to go out and look at the rain. When we got out ,there was a floating platform so we walked towards it and there was a ladder leading up to it. So Ethan and bob climbed up the ladder we got up there and there was a person up there. And he was the weather man we asked him to change the weather, he went outside and said no and then the weather man got caught on the storm and flew of the platform. So we changed the weather to sunny.
March 27, 2017 at 9:13 am
I was doing my morning run. All of a sudden it started to spit so I looked at the rain radar on my phone and it said it was going to be a disaster so lucky for me there were some shops near by so I quickly stopped at one and my friend was working in there today. So I said “hey Lucy there is a massive storm near by so could I stay here until it goes away?”
“Yeah sure” she replied.
“Ok so now I’ll just tell mum and dad where I am and I’ll be fine” I said.
All of a sudden the power went out.
To be continued…..
March 27, 2017 at 9:16 am
My mum and I were looking at some clothes in the new mall that just opened. The mall is so big and everything is so expensive. “Alright let’s go home now” mum said. We left the mall and headed towards our car when this massive grumble came out of the sky. “Was that thunder?” I said looking up towards the sky.
“Yes their must be a storm coming we better hurry and get home” my mum replied putting the groceries in the boot. It stared pooring down with rain, then a massive bolts of lighting came from the sky. “We must be caught in a storm” mum said driving off.
March 27, 2017 at 9:16 am
Today I got caught in a storm. I live near a river which flows out to the sea. I was just riding home on my bike and it started to rain. At first it was really light so I thought I would be ok. But it started get really really bad. Then a wave of water swept me of the bridge. Lucky I only just managed to grab the handle of the bridge. Then all the water went back to its normal level. I’m so lucky to have survived but I lost my bike and it was expensive too…
March 27, 2017 at 9:28 am
We were on the bike track for about an hour and rain started coming down lightly so we didn’t really care about the rain. But then it started pouring heavily , the light breeze started becoming stronger . We were caught in a storm. My friend dash was on a scooter so he was slower than me. “ AAAAAAAAAHH!” Screamed dash “ALLAHU AKBAR ! Screamed Larz who was on a scooter too . “We have to get back home!”NO KIDDING!” Said Larz. We were riding as fast as we could down the hill. The End.
March 27, 2017 at 9:31 am
I slipped on the smooth black planks of the bridge and only just managed to stop myself falling off my bike. The storm flung a wave of salty sea water over me. I was sodden from the rain. My tracksuit and my best sneakers. I was a fool to set off when they foretold a thunderstorm. But the worst was not over yet. I had just gone a few more meters and was looking forward to arriving at the coastal village at the end of this ride when another wave struck with such force that it knocked me off my bike…
April 3, 2017 at 9:34 am
I liked your story but your sentences were a bit to short.
April 3, 2017 at 9:51 am
Maybe you should make your sentences longer and keep adding on the same sentence. Don’t make your sentences too long though.
e.g :
The dog pasted me it’s bone and sat down looking at me in the eyes it had saliva all over it but I didn’t mind.
The sentence can’t be too long but it can’t be too short.
March 27, 2017 at 9:33 am
Caught in a storm
I was walking down a sidewalk and the cars were going crazy. Everyone was boarding up their windows because of the Syclone. The Syclone was starting to hit so I raced home only to find out that nobody was home. The Syclone was coming faster so I ran out the back door too the backyard. I looked up and saw my bike flying away. So I picked up my dog and my iPad. I jumped into the underground bunker. So I put sandbags in front of the bunker so that the Syclone would not get in the bunker…
March 27, 2017 at 1:36 pm
100 Word Challenge
We were caught in a storm a big storm bigger than ever. The worst thing it is a tsunami waves crashing on the beach shaw and in the distance was a tsunami. People were driving as fast as they can the news said it was a mega tsunami and we had to get inside. Apparently it is the worst tsunami you could get and it was coming fast very fast. Everyone got to the highest building in the city but the tsunami was way bigger and soon the tsunami was knocking down buildings and soon it was higher than the hills and we could not survive.
April 3, 2017 at 9:35 am
Late one August night there was a massive storm. The only thing you could see was the lightning flashing and knocking down trees and the water that reflected the light from the lightning. Everyone in the town had evacuated except for one man. For this man it was to late because he was caught in the storm. There was no way for him to leave because the storm would get to him and the lightning would kill him so there was no hope for him anymore. There was no hope in him being alive when its over but we could only hope.
April 3, 2017 at 9:35 am
Week nine 100 word challenge
“Hi I’m D as my friends call me.So I’m here to talk about a storm that I was court in once. In my books it was far bigger than I remember but here we go. So once it was a windy night all the trees looked like they where going to fall over and I had to go pick up my kid from OSHC. I hopped in to my car and guess what my car won’t start. So I had to walk I grabbed my umbrella and started to walk to OSHC.my umbrella turned inside out. A tornado came and…”said D
April 3, 2017 at 9:37 am
The storm
Wind is rushing in and out of my ears, my hair is in my face, I’m soaking wet and freezing cold. I feel faint my whole world is disappearing, And suddenly I see a light with my hands and feet aching I pull my self towards the light. Suddenly I start to fall, I scream. I seem to fall forever until I hit the hard, wet and cold ground. I am in a big wet cold cave. I hear lightning I am not going back out there. I crawl further and further into the cave feeling weaker and weaker each step. I’m scared I won’t make it out alive…
April 3, 2017 at 9:38 am
Zain draft two I was caught in a storm
One day I was riding my bike to school and it started spitting with rain.
The rain started getting bigger and bigger and then it started hailing and snowing and I couldn’t keep control of my bike and I fell off and broke my arm on a big rock in the middle of the road and I almost got run over by a car.
Eventually an Ambulance came and I went to hospital and got a cast then I went home and slept for 2 hours. Once I woke up my arm was hurting and I was in a lot and in pain
April 3, 2017 at 9:38 am
Late one August night there was a massive storm. The only thing you could see was the lightning flashing and knocking down trees and the water that reflected the light from the lightning and the massive waves that came from the water. Everyone in the town had evacuated except for one man. For this man it was to late because he was caught in the storm. There was no way for him to leave because the storm would get to him and the lightning would kill him so there was no hope for him anymore. There was no hope in him being alive when its over but we could only hope…
April 3, 2017 at 9:38 am
That was my second draft
April 3, 2017 at 9:39 am
Draft 2:
I slipped on the smooth black planks of the bridge and only just managed to stop myself falling off my bike. The storm flung a wave of salty sea water over me. I was sodden from the rain. My tracksuit and my best sneakers. I was a fool to set off for a bike ride when they foretold a thunderstorm. But the worst part was not over yet. I had just gone a few more meters on the bridge and was looking forward to arriving at the coastal village at the end of this ride when another wave struck with such force that it knocked me off my bike…
April 3, 2017 at 9:41 am
I woke up and got my roller skates and rolled out the house. I was near the road and I felt a little bit of rain, but I thought in my head “ it’s fine, it is just rain”. So I went to the park and the rain was gone . I was getting bored so I headed back home . The sky was grey , and I was in the middle of the road and then a big storm hit me and I was losing control of my wheels and fell, and a car was coming . So I crawled to safety and I was just in luck the car saw me . Few…
April 3, 2017 at 9:43 am
100 Word Challenge
One day Ethan came around to my house and asked me “ do you want to come for a bike ride with me “. I said
“sure “. So off we went. We rode on the foot path on Neville Street right next to the beach. Suddenly a really heavy storm came. Ethan and I had no idea what to do. So we just rode as fast as we could back home on our bikes. When we got home we watched a movie and made cubby houses, while watching the storm. The End
April 3, 2017 at 9:43 am
Draft: 2
Today I got caught in a storm. I live near a river which flows out to the sea. I was just riding home on my bike and it started to rain. At first it was light so I thought I would be ok. But it started get really really bad. Then a wave of water swept me of the bridge I was riding on. Lucky I just managed to grab the handle of the bridge. Then slowly all the water went back to its normal level. I’m so lucky to have survived but I lost my bike and it was expensive too…
April 3, 2017 at 9:54 am
100 Word Challenge Draft 2
We were caught in a storm, a big storm bigger than ever. The worst thing is it was a tsunami, waves crashing on the beach shaw and in the distance was a tsunami. People were driving as fast as they can the news said it was a mega tsunami and we had to get inside. Apparently it is the worst tsunami you could get and it was coming fast very fast. Everyone got to the highest building in the city but the tsunami was way bigger and soon the tsunami was knocking down buildings. Soon it was higher than the hills and we could not survive.
April 3, 2017 at 9:57 am
One stormy day Ethan and Bob were inside watching a movie. Outside it was sooo stormy. After the movie we decided to go out and look at the rain. When we got outside there was a floating platform. We walked towards it and there was a ladder leading up to it. Ethan and Bob climbed up the ladder. When we got up to the platform there was a person up there. And he was the weather man we asked him to change the weather, he went outside and said no and then the weather man got caught on the storm and flew of the platform. We changed the weather to sunny.
April 3, 2017 at 9:58 am
I decided to go out on my bike. I was riding next to the beach when I realised that no one was around and all the houses had sandbags at the front of them. then the clouds started to get darker and I heard thunder and saw humongous lightning strikes it was like the gods were fuming. I realised that I was caught in a storm.
I ran for cover there was sand everywhere and I ran for cover but all the houses were locked.then a tornado appeared and I whent the flying in the air and landed with a loud thud.
TO BE CONTINUED…
April 3, 2017 at 10:01 am
We were on the bike track for about an hour and rain started coming down lightly so we didn’t really care about the rain. But then it started pouring heavily , the light breeze started becoming stronger . We were in a storm. My friend dash was on a scooter so he was slower than me. “ AAAAAAAAAHH!” Screamed dash “ALLAHU AKBAR ! Screamed Larz who was on a scooter too . “We have to get back home!”NO KIDDING!” Said Larz. We were riding as fast as we could down the hill. The End.
April 3, 2017 at 10:06 am
Caught in a storm
I was walking down a sidewalk and the cars were going crazy. Everyone was boarding up their windows because of the storm that was coming. The Cyclone was starting to hit so I raced home only to find out that nobody was home. The Storm was moving faster so I ran out the back door too the backyard. I looked up and saw my bike flying away. So I picked up my dog and my iPad. I jumped into the underground bunker. So I put sandbags in front of the bunker so that the flood water would not get in the bunker….