Once again, we will post our 100 word challenges to the blog this week. We will give feed back to each other through the week and post re-crafted version of our stories before the end of the week. It’s great to see the progression of your writing through this process. We may even get some feedback from outside of our classroom.
February 20, 2017 at 9:03 am
I was at a basketball game it was Adelaide versus Perth but suddenly a ringing noise sounded it was the most deafening noise ever. Everyone collapsed to the ground it was sooo loud and then all of a sudden a hole appeared in the roof and then Nicolas came smashing through the roof but he misjudged the hight but luckily he fell on the coach of the Perth and then he was arrested and sentenced to life in jail.
February 23, 2017 at 8:52 am
Where was the basketball game played?
February 23, 2017 at 8:53 am
I liked your story and it is very interesting đ
February 23, 2017 at 9:13 am
I was at a basketball game it was Adelaide versus Perth in the Adelaide areana but suddenly a ringing noise sounded it was the most deafening noise ever. Everyone collapsed to the ground it was sooo loud and then all of a sudden a hole appeared in the roof and then Nicolas came smashing through the roof but he misjudged the hight but luckily he fell on the coach of the Perth and then he was arrested and sentenced to life in jail.
February 20, 2017 at 9:09 am
Joe was at his first ever NBA game and the Australian fans were going mental as he walked out onto the court. Joe was a home country hero at the moment. He had just come from Spain and when he was drafted to the jazz. Over there he was an absolute legend. He was amazing. He could dunk so easily. That’s why all the fans were going mental. But as joe took his first shot on that court. Edward leave broke through the roof and committed suicide because he fell to far. Everyone ran away and the game was over.the. It was so loud. The End.
February 23, 2017 at 8:49 am
I think it’s really funny but you spelled Edward Leavy wrong and joe comes from Adelaide
February 23, 2017 at 2:59 pm
I think you need to put “it was so loud” into the story a bit more. Cause it just said everyone ran away it was so loud the end. Also at the end it says over.the.
Other than that good job
February 20, 2017 at 9:10 am
I was in my house at night watching some footage of a whale when I heard a banging noise. The noise grew louder and louder. I turned my computer off grabbed my frying pan, and looked out of the window and saw a man slamming a piece of wood at my door. The noise was so loud that my ears were ringing. He was still bashing at my door I decided to sneak out the back door with my frying pan and phone. I walked out behind him and he turned around. I hit him unconscious and called the police.
February 23, 2017 at 9:19 am
what sort of whale was it?
But apart from that I liked it
February 20, 2017 at 9:11 am
100 word challenge
One day I was vacuuming in the living room and suddenly the noise went louder and louder but it got so loud. I put some ear muffs, but it was louder I turned of the vacuum and it was still so loud then I went outside and it was next door but they weren’t home. I went inside and got the key for next door someone was there and they turned the water on and all the electricity was cut off that was the noise.so they were sad when they got home.
Zach
February 23, 2017 at 8:50 am
100 word challenge 2nd draft
One day I was vacuuming in the living room and suddenly the noise got very loud but it got so loud. I put on some ear muffs, but it was louder I turned off the vacuum and it was still so loud then I went outside and it was louder it was next door but they weren’t home. I went inside and the key for next door someone was there and they turned the water on and all the electricity was cut off that was the noise. So they were sad when they got home.
Zach
February 23, 2017 at 9:38 am
Your 2nd draft makes a lot more sense good job recognising your mistakes.
February 23, 2017 at 9:39 am
Zach
March 7, 2017 at 12:16 am
That was a great story Zach. I liked how you thought that it was the vacuum, but it was the
water and all the electricity was cut out.
March 7, 2017 at 12:39 pm
Thanks Austyn for your feedback
February 20, 2017 at 9:11 am
THE NOISE WAS SO LOUD
I woke up in the night. The noise was so loud. I looked outside the window there were huge drains and divers and all other machines they were all facing the emperor tree it is the oldest and most historical tree on the planet. It practically ancient. But lately there’s been camotian in the government about getting ride of it to build a hidden army base. But they just can’t just get rid of the treee but I guess it’s just time to get rid of it. It was sad watching the tree being cut down but it was to late to save it.
February 20, 2017 at 9:12 am
It was first day at school everyone was so crazy, it felt like I was going to go deaf . The bell went and everybody raced to class and sat down before the teacher came . I had mr Mc Cooper long . He was so strict he took all of the devices and gave us pen and paper and said MATHS! And all of us were like NOOOOOOOO! So we did this test and most of us got high scores. And we were so glad. Was so quiet and then the lights went out and everyone screamed and then we went quiet and a this noise was so loudâŚâŚ..
February 20, 2017 at 9:14 am
Bella was at school on Monday and there was some boys who were playing football at lunch and they were loud but then I heard a noise.the noise was so loud I nearly feel over. Then the bell went and I said to my teacher â what was that big noise just thenâ â i don’t know â said the teacherâ so bella went and found the teacher that was out in the yard and said â what was that noise a couple seconds agoâ I think it was a earthquakeâ said the teacher that was in the yard. 2 minutes later the teacher came to bella and said â it was just an earthquake so there is nothing to worry aboutâ â okâ said bella
THE END
February 23, 2017 at 3:02 pm
After you use a speech mark if you want to speak again you need to go on another line. And when it said (said the teacher) it doesn’t need speak marks
Other than that great story.
February 20, 2017 at 9:15 am
Me and my Mum were rebuilding are house in the middle of the park all are neighbours were complaining but we still did. Almost 2 years go past and finally the house in done. It’s a 2 story house it has 2 bathrooms, a game room, a living room, 4 bedrooms and a guest room but suddenly there was a loud BANG something fell off the shelf I went to pick it up and BOOM I get stabbed in the back. Then a man behind me as I fall and also my Mum dead with a knife in her back then I die.
February 20, 2017 at 9:24 am
Me and my Mum were rebuilding are house in the middle of the park all are neighbours were complaining but we still did. Almost 2 years goes past and finally the house in done. It’s a 2 story house it has 2 bathrooms, a game room, a living room, 4 bedrooms and a guest room but suddenly there was a loud BANG something fell off the shelf I went to pick it up and BOOM I get stabbed in the back. Then I turn and see a man behind me as I fall and I also see my Mum dead with a knife in her back then a die.
February 23, 2017 at 9:27 am
Great story but next time explain more about the story for example what room did the bang go off in
February 20, 2017 at 9:16 am
The sun was shining in my eyes, it was such a beautiful day. “ARI TIME TO GET UP” mum yelled. “COMING” I replied. I got out of bed and started to get ready. My mum had dropped me off at school and left for work. I waved to my mum and then headed towards my best friends Niki and Emily. “RING” the school bell went off we went to our classroom. Today the first lesson was a test about the history of Australia. The class was slient we were all hard at work when a really loud sound started to ring. Everyone started to scream. The noise was so loud.
February 23, 2017 at 9:30 am
That was great I would definitely like to read the rest of that story
February 23, 2017 at 2:55 pm
Really good story I like the detail
February 23, 2017 at 2:56 pm
Really good story I like the details
February 20, 2017 at 9:16 am
Lucy was at school when someone put music on. At first it was alright but 2 minutes later the noise was so loud the class needed to move out of the classroom before the music got to loud that it could burst their eardrums. Lucy was going to find out who put the music up this loud. She made a club that lunch many people came but after a couple clump meetings lots of people left. Lucy put everyone on a job but the next day the same thing happened, the music was on super loud.
February 23, 2017 at 9:33 am
Great story but there are a few typos and I’m guessing that it came on as auto correct
February 20, 2017 at 9:17 am
The noice was so loud that the ground shaked as if there was an earthquake. Mia quickly went under the nearest bed and sat there quietly and then the door opened with a loud creek but nothing was there. Suddenly the window smashed and the glass went everywhere. Mia tried to stay quiet as possible and slowly shuffled forward to see what was happening there was a blank figure standing with a axe but you could just see the axe hovering in air. Then suddenly there loud footsteps coming toward her. Mia slowly shuffled back trying not to make any noise…
February 23, 2017 at 9:36 am
Terrific but there a a few typos and you misplaced some words other than that terrific story
February 20, 2017 at 9:19 am
It was late one August night, i was sitting on my couch reading a book when BANG I heard a noise from my bedroom. I got scared and the only thing I could think of was what was up there. I grabbed my katana sitting on my kitchen bench and ran up to my room. When I got to my room I slowly walked in, It was the most hideous thing I have ever seen. It had a green eye, monstrous teeth, brown fur and the noise it made was so loud. It looked back and roared, it started to charge. It stopped and ate her.
February 23, 2017 at 9:41 am
That was a great story but you missed out on a few capitals and the story was pretty straight forward and I understand that it would of been really hard to word it in a different way
February 20, 2017 at 9:22 am
Science lab đŹ
My class and I were on the best excursion ever,we were at a science lab. We had a scientist showing us around.The scientist had a big white Afro and was dressed in scrubs,she wore heavy makeup and blue plastic gloves, her name was Emma I could tell by her name tag.
Emma walked us into a large and bare room with only one thing in it. There was a big device in the middle Emma called it the shrieker. She asked us if we wanted to see what it could do. We all said yes. Then suddenly she turned on the device walked out of the room and locked the door. Then out of nowhere there was a shriek it felt as though it went on forever it was so loud then the noise stopped….
February 20, 2017 at 9:25 am
It was a normal day for Fred he was watching tv when his cat walked over the tv remote and stepped on it the sound volume when right up to the max the noise was defending.
Fred picked up the remote and turned the tv of .
Then he had to go to work.
The cat was walking around the house and accidentally again stepped on the remote and the tv turned on the cat when crazy running around the house chewing on the tv and hiding under the bed.
when Fred got home the tv was smashed and the cat was hanging from the roof. The end.
February 23, 2017 at 8:57 am
Use full stops and commas to break up some of your longer sentences. Check the spelling of the words “off” and”went”. Make sure sentences always start with a capital letter.
You have crafted a creative and interesting story.
February 23, 2017 at 9:05 am
I think that’s a weird story I think you should make it more normal but it’s a good story anyway to Edward
February 23, 2017 at 9:43 am
Really good story but there was no conflict other than that pretty good
February 20, 2017 at 9:25 am
One day a person called Sophie was home alone and she was just watching TV. Her favourite show was on and she was playing video games on her iPad as well. Her parents were at her new neighbours house. He was a weird old man and he had a small yappy dog that never stoped barking. They were supposed to be home by now and it was 10:00 at night. They were supposed to be back at 9:00. She was getting worried and was thinking about going to her neighbours and checking on them. But then she heard a noise. The noise was so loud…
February 20, 2017 at 9:29 am
The noise was so loudâŚ. that I covered my ears. This surely had to be the noisiest mall in the world. I went up an escalator and turned into a shop. Where were the clothes I needed to purchase? Aha. Right at the back of the shop. I Collected them and went to the cashier to pay. The queue wasnât that long, I got to the front quickly. When I checked my watch it was 8:07. I better get home, tomorrow I have a long day. I walked to the bus stop and waited. Soon enough one drove along⌠P.S: Sorry it’s a bit sparsely written.
February 20, 2017 at 9:29 am
I just got home from school and I was so tired so I went upstairs and laid on my bed listening to music. I opened the curtains and suddenly the noise was SO loud. It looked like our next door neighbours were having a party. I told my mum to go outside and ask them nicely to turn the music down. My mum asked them nicely and they said ” sure, sorry we were just having a move in party”. They offered if we would like to join in so we all said “yes”. We had a great time celebrating with them.
The End
February 23, 2017 at 8:53 am
Consider using full stops to shorten some of your sentences as this will help to add suspense. For example; “I just got home from school. I was so tired. I went upstairs to lay on my bed and listen to music. I opened the curtains. Suddenly the noise was SO loud.”
February 20, 2017 at 9:35 am
The egg
Once upon a time there was a boy. The boy was walking along the footpath when he saw a shimmer of green coming from a bush. He ran towards the bush and picked up a green egg. The boy put the egg in his backpack and ran back towards his house. He got home and put it on his desk and it cracked open and it screamed so loud the noise was so loud. It was a dragon thing is was definitely and dragon because it look like a lizard with wings he had hide it because his mum was at the door! He through egg under the bed and ran
The end to be countinued⌅
February 20, 2017 at 9:37 am
100 word challenge
It was a sunny evening, we were all at our grandparents house, my mum, dad, brother and sister. We were all celebrating my 12th birthday. All of us were about to have cake but before everyone was giving presents to me. All up I collected 200 dollars. I was saving up for a PS4. After all of that we lighted up the candles for the cake. They all sang happy birthday to me. The noise was so loud I covered my ears. The cake was so nice also my favourite chocolate with skittles!!!
February 20, 2017 at 9:37 am
I was sleeping one night and I heard this loud booming noise coming from the laundry, but the washing was not on. I was getting scared as the noise got louder and louder. All of a sudden it stopped then the noise was so loud. I wanted to know what it was so I jumped out of bed and tip toed to the laundry. I peeked through the door and saw a movement. The clothes were shaking I saw a little head, it was my little dog Milo. He had a tee shirt on his head and kept on banging his head on the washing machine.
February 23, 2017 at 9:06 am
I like your story and how you used describing words, but you could make the sentences a bit shorter.
February 23, 2017 at 2:52 pm
I was sleeping one night and I heard this loud booming noise coming from the laundry. But the washing was not on. I was getting scared as the noise got louder and louder. All of a sudden it stopped then the noise was so loud. I wanted to know what it was so I jumped out of bed and tip toed to the laundry. I peeked through the door and saw a movement. The clothes were shaking, I saw a little head it was my little dog Milo. He had a tee shirt on his head and kept on hitting his head on the washing machine.
February 20, 2017 at 9:44 am
100 word challenge
The noise was so loud . Even though it was a truck reversing it was terrible. It was like a kookaburra and a baby screaming I did not like it one bit . Had never heard one so loud but it was right in front of me so it makes sense. Everyone was complaining about the sound it was making but my parent didn’t know because they were away. The other neighbors were complaining but they were working in front of my house. People couldn’t get past the road works and for some reason started complaining to me for some reason but I didn’t know what they were doing.
February 23, 2017 at 9:36 am
Try to make your sentences shorter by adding more full stops. But it is still good.
February 20, 2017 at 9:44 am
One sunny day bob and bill Were on a science execution with there school. So they left to go, they got in the bus on the way to the science lab when the class got to the science lab they learned about chemicals and potions. but while we were learning we heard this Big Bang the noise was so loud everybody screamed and ran around. And the teachers went to look outside at the building next door had caught on fire. So the teachers rang 000 and the fire trucks came. The class got evacuated back to the school.
February 20, 2017 at 11:13 am
I don’t think that it is supposed to say execution.
February 21, 2017 at 7:36 pm
First line many were doesn’t need a capital letter but apart from that all good
February 23, 2017 at 9:30 am
Good use of adjectives, make sure names start with capital letters. Make sure sentences start with capital letters and use full stops and commas to break up some of your longer sentences.
It is a very exciting and action-packed story.
February 20, 2017 at 9:46 am
He was walking with his family through the
shopping centrfood shopping and he was also getting a new bike with his birthday money and then a siren started the noise was so loud there was a person with a gun he started shooting when he heard the siren qaw was 15 people hurt and 1 dead it was a sad day someone died and he didn’t get his bike he was sad when he got home so they
to a proper bike shop and got a good bike and he was really happy and he started riding around with his friends.
February 23, 2017 at 9:27 am
check the spelling on “shopping centre” also make sure you have spaces between all of your words. Use full stops and commas to break up your sentences as they currently quite long.
February 23, 2017 at 9:31 am
Maybe next time give a name to the main characters
February 23, 2017 at 9:45 am
Zain draft two
He was walking through the shopping centre getting lunch. It was his birthday and he was greeting a new bike. Then a siren started for everyone to get out but he couldn’t because he had fallen over and people where trampling on him and there was the guy the guy with the gun.the noise was so loud it hurt his ears really badly
When he got out he went home he was so sad and hurt and he couldn’t hear properly and hew wasn’t doing well but he still got his bike.
March 7, 2017 at 12:17 am
good story it was cool im Ben
March 7, 2017 at 11:42 am
Thanks Ben for commenting on my story
February 20, 2017 at 10:11 am
The noise was so loud I was at home and there was a thunderstorm. Bang crash bang crash. The nose Capet getting louder and louder. Bang crash bang crash. I was on the couch watching tv when all of a sudden the lights went out the storm was getting worse and worse. Bang crash bang crash. Then all of a sudden the ground started to shake I looked out of the window and the road was breaking I was freaking out to the max I screamed for my mum but she wasn’t home so I screamed for my dad but he wasn’t home ether .
February 23, 2017 at 9:02 am
Kalani , What does the device do ? And a bit more detail and explain why there going on this trip.
February 20, 2017 at 10:24 am
The noise was SO loud it started to blow my eardrums that it felt like they where bleeding. I went to go see where the sound was coming from. So I did something that no one has ever done. I went through the first challenge it was swinging axes. I then went through it at the right time but the axes skimmed my hair and that was when I completed the first challenge. Second challenge is the fire path to clam the silver earplugs. I ran across the burning path and I fell nearly about to fall in to the lava and I got the silver earplugs and I then moved up to my brothers doer and opened it and it was my brother playing a loud video game.
February 22, 2017 at 10:46 am
Lily your đŻ word challenge sounds like a good plan and I think that it was a good sort narrative đ
February 22, 2017 at 10:52 am
It was school again everyone was so crazy, it felt like I was going to go deaf . The bell went and everybody raced to class and sat down before the teacher came . I had mr Mc maths . He was so strict he took all of the devices and gave us a pencil and said MATHS! And all of us were like NOOOOOOOO! So we did this test and most of us got high scores. And we were so glad. Was so quiet and then the lights went out and everyone screamed and then we went quiet and a this noise was so loudâŚâŚ.. a girl screamed out helpâŚâŚâŚ
The end
Second draft
February 22, 2017 at 3:29 pm
Joe was at his first ever NBA game and the Australian fans were going mental as he walked out onto the court. The noise was so loud. Joe was a home country hero at the time. He had just come from Spain and when he was drafted to the jazz. Over there he was a legend. He could dunk so easily. That’s why all the fans were going mental. But as joe took his first shot on court……Edward leavy broke through the roof and accidentally misjudged the hight but fell on the cairns coach. He was arrested. Everyone ran away and the game was over. The End.
February 23, 2017 at 7:12 am
I was in my house one night watching some footage of a whale when I heard a banging noise. The noise grew louder and louder. I turned my computer off grabbed my frying pan, and looked out of the window and saw a man slamming a piece of wood at my door. The noise was so loud that I didn’t know if I was awake or asleep. He was still bashing on my door when i realised that I was awake. I snuck out the side of my house and hit him with a baseball bat and he was taken away forever.
My second draft
February 23, 2017 at 7:14 am
I was in my house one night watching some footage of a turtle when I heard a banging noise. The noise grew louder and louder. I turned my computer off grabbed my frying pan, and looked out of the window and saw a man slamming a piece of wood at my door. The noise was so loud that I didn’t know if I was awake or asleep. He was still bashing on my door when i realised that I was awake. I snuck out the side of my house and hit him with a baseball bat and he was taken away forever.
My second draft
February 23, 2017 at 9:04 am
I just got home from school. I was so tired. So I went upstairs and laid on my bed while listening to music. I opened the curtains. Suddenly the noise was SO loud. It looked like our next door neighbours were having a party. I told my mum to go outside and ask them nicely to turn the music down. My mum asked them nicely and they said â sure, sorry we were just having a move in partyâ. They offered if we would like to join in so we all said âyesâ. We had a great time celebrating with them.â¨The End
February 23, 2017 at 9:04 am
Kalani I think that you need to add more punctuation in your writing because there was a few sentences that didn’t make any sense at all. What dose the device do? Why are they going on this trip?
February 23, 2017 at 9:08 am
To savanna
I am curious to know what the noise was. It was very well detailed and I quite enjoyed your story.
From lily
February 23, 2017 at 9:09 am
Very well detailed it was good ,but about the neighbor you suddenly talked about the neighbour and you didn’t explained
February 23, 2017 at 9:11 am
To skylah
Good punctuation and next time if you can explain if you were happy to be back at school as well.
February 23, 2017 at 9:20 am
To Isabelle, I like how your story could be true, but maybe make it a bit more exciting.
February 23, 2017 at 9:23 am
Draft 2
Lucy was at school when someone put music on. At first it was alright but 2 minutes later the noise was so loud the class needed to move out of the classroom before the music got to loud that it could burst their eardrums. Lucy was going to find out who put the music up this loud. She made a club at lunch that many people came to but after a couple club meetings lots of people left. Lucy put everyone on a job but the next day the same thing happened, the music was on super loud.
February 23, 2017 at 9:39 am
One sunny day Bob and Bill were on a science excursion with their school. So they left to go, they got in the bus on the way to the science lab when the class got to the science lab, they learned about chemicals and potions. but while we were learning we heard this Big Bang the noise was so loud everybody screamed and ran around. And the teachers went to look outside at the building next door had caught on fire. So the teachers rang 000 and the fire trucks came. The class got evacuated back to the school.
February 23, 2017 at 11:34 pm
The noise was so loud. It was a scream coming from outside. I immediately grabbed a chair and looked outside. It was this weird old guy. He was wearing a shirt that said,â Iâm so lazy.â on it. He was running around my backyard like a mad man just screaming. I told him to stop but he didn’t listen (I don’t even think he heard me because he was screaming so loud). I got so sick of it I went outside and hit him with the chair. I called the cops and threw the chair in the woods.
The End.
vist my blog: http://edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogces/
February 28, 2017 at 4:11 am
Hi I tried your challenge. I was also wondering if you could join my blog at edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogkennedy795
One day I woke up to this noise. The noise was so loud. I walked down stairs to see this man and women throwing glass plates on the floor and walls. I didn’t know what to do, so I grabbed a bat and started chasing the intruders. Then they started throwing them at me, but I dodged them. Then I saw the man and women ripping their faces off. Then I noticed it was my mom and dad trying to see what I would do in a robbery situation. Now the loud noise is gone and might never happen again.
March 1, 2017 at 8:04 am
Great story love it
March 1, 2017 at 9:39 am
Good story. It’s exciting and engaging.
February 28, 2017 at 4:19 am
The championship,Me and Garrett were Warming up my dirtbike. And then the race was going to start. When I heard that gunshot I hammered on the gas. And I got in first.
Right away My Throttle locked up. The noise was so loud. I called garrett to come get it fixed. So he ran on the track. He got his tools and started working. I heard him rushing to get me going again. And when I heard him say done I clicked my throttle back .And rushed back to second.Right then I just crossed in first and won.
I Did your challenge to come visit my blog at edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogblogmason259
March 7, 2017 at 12:46 pm
I think it was very interesting and I’m guessing that you like motorbikes because I also liked it
February 28, 2017 at 4:19 am
Hi I tried your challenge! check out my blog at edublog.amdsb.ca/jwc
I walked through the crowd of people to try and get a view of what was happening. The people were pushing each other then out of nowhere a plane the size of a field crashed into the crowd! The noise was so loud! Everyone was running and screaming. There were dead people all around. I was rushing in to see if I could find my dog. Now the only question on my mind was âWHERE IS MY DOG?â I heard barking through the crowd of people and I ran to the sound. I finally found my dog. Safe and sound.
February 28, 2017 at 4:20 am
Hi there! I tried your challenge and my my was it ever fun! Please check it out at edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogajc
I was sleeping in the attic. I woke up to a sound of a million dogs barking! The noise was so loud! There was a bacon truck right outside of my house! I had to stop the annoying sound of dogs barking for bacon I tried to stop the sound by throwing a jar of peanut butter far down the street so I could get rid of all the bacon. About five to ten minutes later the dogs came back to the truck. I didn’t know what to do. Then I thought about feeding the dogs so they will stop.
February 28, 2017 at 4:20 am
Hey, I did this too come check out my one at edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogtdd
February 28, 2017 at 4:21 am
Hi, I am from grade six is awesome in Canada I took on the challenge and if you want you can visit my blog @ http://edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogaasc/. Here is my story.
I woke up to my mom yelling at me, my brother crying, my sister jumping on me. The noise was so loud I can’t take it anymore. I went upstairs and put a show on for my sister, gave my brother a yogurt, and found my moms phone for her. Now everything is peaceful, my job is done here. But then my dog starts barking. I donât know what to do. I got it. I will put him outside with his favorite toy. Yes, he is out and it is quite. I did it, got it quiet finally. It’s done.
March 2, 2017 at 12:33 pm
Hi Andrea,
I am Brianna, I am from Australia and I am a year seven.
I love your story its is like a normal story at home. It is peaceful but in the same way exciting.
February 28, 2017 at 4:23 am
We did the hundred word challenge to check out my blog
http://edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogmiles883/
I was in my house sleeping it was 11:30 PM. Then I woke up because I heard something. The noise was so loud my ears were breaking. CLUNK, BANG, SMASH the sound came from down stairs. I snuck down stairs quietly. I looked in the kitchen there I saw a man in all black, wearing a black mask.He was breaking glass dishes then he broke our TV. Then he went into the living room. I snuck into the kitchen and grabbed a piece of glass. Then I snuck up behind the man and stabbed him he died instantly.
March 1, 2017 at 9:43 am
Nice story I liked reading it ( just so you know, my brothers name is Miles too!)
March 1, 2017 at 9:44 am
Hi Miles. I really liked your story. I think it’s great that you guys are doing the hundred word challenge. Yours is really interesting. Keep up the good work miles. From Ethan M, Woodend primary, Australia đ
March 2, 2017 at 12:49 pm
I liked the detail you had in the story it was very good. There wasn’t many mistakes. Which was good.
February 28, 2017 at 4:25 am
Hi, I am from Grade 6 Is Awesome in Canada our class took on the 100 word challenge. Please feel free to check out my blog!
Here is my blog
http://edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogmllzv/
Here is my story!
I got up at 9:00 am there was a huge noise, the noise was so loud, I then got up to see where the noise was coming from. When I opened up the door I got sucked into an amazing world, it was a fairytale world! I could not believe it was incredible. Then I noticed something it was a frog that talked I went closer to him and asked him how to get back to my world he said that I can throw you up back into your world, now I am back into my world for now.
February 28, 2017 at 4:26 am
Hi, I tried the challenge too. Please visit my blog at edublog.amdsb.ca/emily854/
The deafening scream filled reality. The noise was so loud that I couldnât remember life without it. Somebody could be dying somewhere, but yet it could just be a four year old kid who can’t sleep. The only way to find out is to go and see, but if someone is being tortured then I would be next! I can’t bear it anymore. I have to go see. I ran to my backyard to find a small tape recorder lying on the lawn. It was just a prank, but I got a free tape recorder. Next time they shouldn’t bother.
(Word Count:100)
February 28, 2017 at 4:31 am
Sorry I gave you the wrong link. My link is http://edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogemily854/
February 28, 2017 at 4:27 am
Hi I’m Alena from Mrs. Mascolo’s grade 6 class.
Here is my 100 word story…
The noise was so loud. I felt like my ears were going to fall of my head. I looked around to see what it was. Then I saw it. It was this guy he was in a big machine! He wanted to destroy my home. I thought fast. Then I had an idea. I ran to the deck grabbed the biggest hose I could ever find and I sprayed him. He flew right out of the machine screaming at the top of his lungs and then I called the police. And I got a cool medal for being so brave.
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Awesomely Here,
Alena
February 28, 2017 at 4:29 am
I had a nice summer day when I was dozing off in my bed at 9:30pm . I was just falling asleep and I heard a big BOOM. I was awake within a millisecond scared of if it was a lightning storm and we got hit. I got up to my feet almost falling down because my knees were so shaky. Than a big BOOM again âthe noise was so loud.â Than the worst thing happened I saw my mom and dad on the ground with lightning bolt scars. I started to cry and then I woke up for real.
I really like the idea of the 100 word challenge because it’s fun, it’s a challenge, and your writing.
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March 1, 2017 at 9:10 am
Awesome story. I like how you made it a dream.
February 28, 2017 at 4:29 am
Hi I tried your challenge check out my blog at edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogcarmondy808
I heard a loud noise coming from the basement it was a very scary basement I crept down the stairs just to get a peek of what was making the noise. The noise was so loud I saw a bear cub roaring because it was hurt it was stuck in a hole. I ran up the stairs as fast as I could. I went to my dad’s shed and grabbed a hammer and smashed the cement and saved the the baby bear I helped it out the window it licked me and ran away I felt good about myself. End.
February 28, 2017 at 4:30 am
HI I tried your 100 Word Challenge/The Noise Was So Loud it was so much fun. Come check out my blog.
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I was in my bed sleeping then all of a sudden I fell out of my bed BANG. Then bang âThe Noise Was So Loud.âit was coming from the front door. It looked like the guy in the paper the cereal killer. It was him. I didn’t know what to do I tried to call my mom and my bestie then I remembered that they were gone on vacation. I thought for a moment then I grabbed my baseball bat I snuck up behind him; bang I hit him and called the police and they took him away.
Fin
February 28, 2017 at 4:31 am
It was in the middle of the night. I heard something It was so loud couldn’t fall asleep I heard someone kick the door down so I got out a frying pan and a knife just for protection. I saw someone he had a shovel so I was trying to sneak around the corner he said âhey you there.â So I quickly knocked him out. I called the police I a dog barked so I jumped. I thought he was waking up so I hit him again. They finally arrived after one or two hours so then I fell asleep. I’m from grade 6 is awesome.
February 28, 2017 at 4:32 am
Hi, my name is Austyn and this is my 100 word challenge.
lightning and the noise was so loud I closed my eyeâs then I opened my eyeâs and I was in U.S.A. My mouth was open all the way because somehow I was in a different country because a really loud lightning storm happened. I called my Mom and she said she didnât know how I got here. But after a few minutes I finally figured out how it happened. I was carried by the wind. Then I hailed a taxi and went home. Then I said I missed you.
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February 28, 2017 at 4:37 am
Hello,
I tried your 100 word challenge. Here is a link to my blog please check it out http://edublog.amdsb.ca/myblogaaron935/
Here is my 100 words
One day I went down south to Kansas to watch a basketball game. Halfway through the game there was a ear blowing noise. The noise was so loud all of the windows shattered into pieces. All of the sudden the players disappeared! I ran down to the benches and started to investigate. I found a feather, this clue just gave it away. I went to the vulture’s lair and saw both teams tied up. I punched the vulture in the beak so hard he flew through several walls. The teams got back to the game and all was amazingly good.
March 1, 2017 at 9:04 am
To Aron
That was an awesome story. I am dying to know who won.
I bet that you must be very strong then to punch someone through the wall.
March 15, 2017 at 10:53 am
100 Word Challenge
It’s was a creepy night you could hear the owls hooting from this one tree. CRASH!!! A car smashed into our neighbours house and the noise was so loud. Our whole family’s attention faced to the noise and we went over there. The fat man’s head was crushed by the bricks but all of a sudden he got up with no head and he put his arms out at us and walked towards us. Our Dad was speechless and then the fat guy ripped our Dadâs lungs out then our Mumâs and my older sister they were all getting ripped alive. I ran upstairs but I was no match for the fat guy and soon I ended up like my family.
March 16, 2017 at 11:16 am
Zombie Outbreak
A family was driving down the highway they were talking about racism and Donald Trump’s wall. They were talking about how much the wall with cost the boy said
âIt will cost 23 millionâ.
But the girl said
âno it probably going to cost 9 billionâ.
As the conversation went on there was a man standing in the middle of the road Dad stopped and said
â WHAT THE HECK IS THIS GUY DOINGâ.
As my Dad got out the car there were more men surrounded us with blood all over them but then they started running and ripping us to shreds the only thing I could hear was my Mum, Dad and Sister screams.